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Enjoyed this in the same way I enjoy cryptic crosswords. Here's constructive non-invasive criticism:

Up to 9 sec., captivating.

Car door reverb at 5 sec., nice touch.

Music, 11-22 sec., first whiff of queen bee pheromones. QBP (will explain, promise)

Leafy section, 14 sec., QBP.

Sand dunes at 22 sec., very amazing, you get 10 bonus points, putting you out of reach of your rivals and a home final is secure. Those dunes are actually "chevrons" from a tsunami in 2900 B.C. I learned this yesterday. Please see OzGeographics https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fri-lXx01x4 In a fake beer ad based on one quite charming incongruity, the tsunami reference is a stroke of pure genius, not to say luck.

Forest walk at 33, lovely, too short.

Lovebirds with straws, ditto.

Icecubes, QBP.

Lips and tongue segment, 47sec., too much incongruous again. QBP

Colour segments, ditto. QBP.

Mind you, I could not have resisted the lip-tongue bit myself. QBP to me.

Queen bee pheromones refers to (scientists say) the mechanism queen bees use to control their workers. They release nine distinct pheronomes, each stopping the workers from continuing with a particular activity. If this sounds like a conspiracy theory, don't blame me, DBM, I'm just the piano player. So the vocabulary of the typical queen is "no no no no no no no no NO !!!!!!!!!" If this sounds scarily familiar, DBM, I've never been anyone's best man.

In a footnote of minor portent, a relative of mine, one of the Stowe family in South Otago, near Tapanui, is responsible for having created the "Yeah, right !" Tui beer ads. Her family is descended from the same line as Harriet Beecher Stowe. Not in a direct line, but in the field of literary genius, near enough. Harriet was next door neighbour to Mark Twain. If you manage to incorporate these associations in your next similar effort, you will WOW the Americans and never have to work again. They are suckers for celebrities and tsunamis. As for subtle incongruities, try the Poms and Aussies, they'll get it. Thanks for some memorable and likeable images. Steve Clougher

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